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My story needs help. Need to finish for school, need Ideas. Thanks :)?

April 21, 2010 by  
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MYTH
By: Naomi Beagan.

Chapter 1; Jordan

“Taxi!” Shouted the disgruntled 19 year old, On a busy New York City street. Hundreds of cars zoomed by the young man, before a yellow cab stopped in front of him. Gratefully he jumped in and told the driver, “7th Ave and W 46th ST, please.” The young man took a piece of paper out of his briefcase. Jordan, the young man, fixed his hair. He impatiently asked “Do you mind going a bit faster? I am going to be late!”. The driver grumbled to himself and sped up the car. The driver raced faster and faster. A light turned red, but still the car didn’t stop. Screaming in sheer terror, Jordan could not wrench his eyes from what would surely be his end.

Chapter 2: Nicole and Hunter
On a beautiful autumn morning in Boston, Nicole dashed about the kitchen dining room after her family. She took her infant sister and set her on the table trying to keep an eye on the rest of the kids. Among her siblings was her twin brother, Hunter. Scanning the house for her brother she saw he was playing cards with some more of her brothers. Nicole walked over to her brother. “Hey Hunter.” Nicole said “Sissy I am bored. Can we go somewhere?” Hunter asked. “You just want to drive my car.” Nicole sighed, rolling her eyes. “No.” he replied. “Fine we’ll walk then.” Nicole smirked. “Fine.” Hunter agreed. They went outside and began walking downtown, taking the back way through the forest. You could hear the jingling of change in their pants, then two loud screams, and they were gone….

Chapter 3; Andrea.
“Charge it.” Andrea said to the cashier and he put her new shoes in the checkout bag. She handed him her credit card and he scanned it. Andrea smiled and took her belongings, then headed to the next store. She tossed her hair back and opened the door to a clothing store and her smile got wider as she noticed the new shipments of the latest fall fashions. Andrea grabbed the cutest outfit to try on and headed towards the dressing rooms. But suddenly, She dropped her things, tried to scream, but it was too late. The beast already had her.

Chapter 4; Kore
Kore rolled out of bed, not wanting to get up. The sun was shining through the window. “WAKE UP!” Her mother shouted. “Don’t want to!” Kore half mumbled, half shouted. You could tell Kore was still in deep sleep. “You have to!” Her mom replied. “Why?” She complained. “Just get up.” Her mom said annoyed. “Fine.” Kore told her. She got dressed and headed downstairs while trying to put her dark brown hair in a ponytail. “Morning.” Her mom greeted Kore. She grunted. Kore’s father kept drinking coffee and reading his newspaper. Her Mom started to make breakfast. “Darling, you mind getting my flowers from the basement?” Her mother asked her. “Sure.” She said kindly. She stumbled down to the basement. She looked around the misty dark basement. A little frighten she grabbed the flowers and started to run, but something grabbed her, she let out a scream, then she was gone.

Chapter 6: White Table.
Jordan mad yelled, “Where am I!?” Jordan noticed four other people all around him sitting at a white table. Suddenly people appeared on right sides of each person. The leader, a man was at the head of the table. Kore who was confused and a bit frightened, bravely asked “ Where are we and who are you guys?” The man at the head of the table replied, “You in a hidden part inside Mount Olympus, and to answer you first question, I am Zeus.” Hunter was in disbelief. Then out of now where, was an “Ug. What am I wearing?” Andrea asked. The woman on the right side of her had a hurt face. “You don’t like it? I made the dresses myself.” “No, no, the dress is fine but these shoes do not match.” Andrea replied. Hunter laughed. Nicole looked up at the people who had appeared out of nowhere. “So who exactly are all you guys?” She asked. “We are gods, gosh, haven’t any of you ever read Greek mythology?” One of them said. “Um… no!” Andrea shot back. “Well I am Aphrodite.” Aphrodite said. “I’m Andrea.” Andrea said, having no intentions to tell the strange woman her name. “And I am Artemis” The woman on the right of Nicole said.Artimis, the girl on the right of her was more of a child though, and Nicole could feel it. “I am Nicole.” Nicole suddenly blurted out. She felt like she was being tricked, into saying her name. “I am out of here.” Kore said frightened. She was shock how she even got here in the first place and when she tried to get out of her chair she couldn’t and was stuck, thanks to some force. “Hello. I am Persephone.” The woman on the right side of her said, “What’s your name.” Automatically without thinking she said her name, Kore. “Now for you Hunter.” A man said, “I’m Apollo.” Hunter looked to the right of him. “How did you know my name?” He asked Apollo a bit confused. Then Hunter pointed to the man next to Jordan. “Do you know his name?” He pointed to Jordan to Jordan this time. The man gave an evil grin. “His name is Jordan, a
The man gave an evil grin. “His name is Jordan, and I am Hades…” Then in a blink of an eye they all appeared on mount Olympus.

Chapter 8: Mount Olympus
A wind that chilled you down to your bones swept through the children’s summer clothes, making shivers’ tingle down their spines. “It’s cold!” Andrea complained, “Why didn’t you tell me we were going to a freaking cold mountain I could have brought my $280 dollar pink wind breaker jacket!” “Oh quit your whining!” Zeus said as he snapped his fingers, making matching gray parkas appear in each of the child’ hands. “Oh thank you Zeus!” Nicole said, astonished at the quick appearance. “Now, here’s what you have to do.” Zeus started with his directions, “Each of you will be left alone on this mountain, however I will give you the powers that your specific God has, so each of you will be unique. Your goal is to find the missing silver orb, that I “misplaced” on this mountain.”. “Pfff!!We are not doing that!” yelled Andrea,
“You obviously didn’t misplace it, I mean I’m not stupid, I saw your fingers go up when you said misplaced! Why the heck are you using us anyway? Go mess with people your own size!” “As I have told you, we are bored you little brat.” Zeus explained. “Look, Andrea! Just shut your mouth okay. I like quests.” Hunter said. “Oh fine! But I still don’t understand Zeus, why are you making us do this when you already know where it is!?” Andrea complained once more. “Haha!” Zeus chuckled, “We are Gods! What are we supposed to do for fun instead of watching over the world every single day? Now off you go, good luck and beware, for there are giant snow wolverines!” Zeus chuckles to himself once more. He gave one more snap of his fingers and the children were left all alone on a huge mountain in the middle of now where, with powers they didn’t know existed…

Chapter 9

So yeah I need ideas for chapter nine, like how to get it rolling, learning thier powers ect.
sorry bout that. It should be
Chapter 5: White Table.
Chapter 6: Mount Olympus
Chapter 7: NEED IDEAS FOR.
Yeah They are not really chapter chapters, they are chapters for a short story.
So any ideas to get the story rolling?

Comments

3 Responses to “My story needs help. Need to finish for school, need Ideas. Thanks :)?”
  1. Ray H says:

    well first fix your numbering…and i couldnt even get through it.

  2. marinasala@rocketmail.com says:

    Well first of all, I think your chapters should be a little longer…?

  3. cbrownie says:

    Call it a short attention span, but once they got on Olympus, it was all a blur. Too much dialogue, not enough action. I’m sure that will change once you get into the beef of the story since they’re going on a hunt.

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