is this a good rap i wrote?
April 20, 2010 by
Filed under new york fine dining
I am sick like stick in the mud in a flood I wont stumble I wont tumble I cant call, myself any good, I came from the hood, I should but know I can blow any second any minute any time, in the end Im gonna know whats mine, im’a shine, im so fine, we can dine we can crime, im the best , im your test, hah you guessed that im dressed for the hood, new york hat over my eyes, I tie ties, with record deals with plies, your times are over my times are jus begginning, and when I win i’ll be winning i’ll be imprintin’ my name in the history books, I have the looks, I have the hooks, all I need is the crooks to run this label, I got the stable are you able to be stable wrap your neck in cable and put in a stable and underneath the table bi-tch
YYYYYYYYYYes it is… keep rapping..ur so fine!!!!! u probably need to work some more on your raps but i find this one not bad at all, so keep trying and keep rapping! GOOD LUCK
That seems like a freestyle. You know, when you’re just looking for the next word to rhyme with and not really caring what you say overall.
And it seems too formulaic. Too many raps go that way:
1st. You talk about how good you are.
2nd: You talk about where you from and what scum you are.
3nd. But in true 8 Mile glory, you know that you’re going to blow up some day.
Not sayin’ you can’t do it that way, but if you are, make sure you got just a little more lyric, some metaphors, some more words, somethin! Gotta be different than most.
Bottom line, I give you a C-
Yes… it is
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It could use some work. Also write it in a bar format. For example:
roses are red, violets are blue,
I like food, and I love beef stew,
I eat soup, because I have the flu,
I slept woke up, it was two,
People can understand what rhymes that way and it is easier to read.